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Haiku Classic: May 21, 2017

sunset:

    one last parachute

    floats slowly down

    --

    Kay M. Avila (1958- ): Yokosuka, Japan. From Cor van den Heuvel (ed.): "The Haiku Anthology, 3rd," Norton.

    Selected and commented on by Isamu Hashimoto

    I now live near the air base in Narashino, Chiba, Japan. From the narrow verandah of mine, I can clearly see 10 exercising parachutes at once, slowly coming down from the Self Defense Force transport airplane. Warfare aside, they are indeed beautiful. Kay impressively catches the falling parachutes with the final line: "floats slowly down."

    --

    For Making a Good Haiku

    Hint 21: Repetition. This is one of the most typical haiku methods, but there would have given rise to many unsuccessful debris.

    first cicada chirping

    a priest takes off his straw hat

    and puts it back

    -- Isamu Hashimoto (1941- )

    Review:

    Hints for making good haiku: 1: As it is. 2: Effective nouns. 3: Deep inner sentiments. 4: The two-liner. 5: Depict plainly. 6: Without any petty subjective awareness. 7: Suppress our feelings. 8: Mother and child. 9: Use the simile. 10: Focusing on deep human sentiment. 11: On children. 12: "Newness." 13: Between man and woman. 14: The last line. 15: A self-portrait. 16: Make the haiku tell itself. 17: Unexpectedness. 18: With no seasonal word. 19: Disclosure. 20: The "concrete" haiku.

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